First Page Critiques
Reading Time: 1 minute Today, I’m sharing the first page of a story from a brave author, who shall remain anonymous. Thank you, bold author, for taking a risk to seek feedback on your story.
The story is set in 1970 and describes a soldier returning from Vietnam. What follows is the original as submitted. My critique follows. Lastly, is a rewrite incorporating my critique and suggestions.
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What are your thoughts about the changes I suggest? What did I miss? What would you have done differently?
If you’re interested in having a critique of your first page, visit this link on my website for instructions: First Page Critique
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